Wednesday, April 3, 2013

FIVE SENTENCE FICTION - Words

Lillie McFerrin gave us   WORDS  as the prompt for this week's Five Sentence Fiction
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And once again for this week's endeavor, since the prompt once again had 5 LETTERS, I decided to start each sentence with one of the letters in the word.  As a result the prompt appears not only in my endeavor; it also appears looking down the sentences


SOOTHING WORDS

W hen I was young and began to go to school, anytime strange events occurred I told my mother.

O f course she always had the proper WORDS to use to try to comfort me about each one.

R egretfully I can’t return to those days of my youth where all was well in my world; because a tragic event came into my life last week.

D eath, the tragic event which always destroy anything good, came last week and took her away.

S adness did creep into my life knowing she’ll never be around for us to talk to each other any more like we did in those wonderful days of my youth, but the memories of these same days and her WORDS will live in my mind and heart forever.


NOTE: Apparently, I didn’t when I wrote these five sentences, based on the few responses I’ve already received, I didn’t realized how powerful the words might prove to be. Rest assured this is fiction. My mother had died over 19 years ago, but her memory is still with me, in my heart and in my mind; just as all of your loved ones who have passed away are with you.
 

40 comments:

  1. Robin - is this non-fiction? You need to correct the 3rd para hun-
    because yesterday a tragic event came into my life last week.
    Yesterday or last week?

    Has your mother passed :-( as this is how I read this?

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    1. THANKS for spotting the error. HASTE makes WASTE as the saying goes.
      My mother had passed over 19 years ago, the feeling is still the same. I just wanted to make it easier to relate to.
      So what did you think of the message it suggests?

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  2. Robin, if this is non-fiction, I extend my sympathy to you. I lost my mother in February, and there is a big hole in my heart, because I miss her so. May the Lord comfort you during this difficult time.

    Many blessings,
    Cheryl

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    1. THANKS for your belated condolences and please my response to Rambly T.

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  3. Hi Robin ~ Beautiful tribute to your mom. I love the bittersweet message. People die but their words and gestures live forever. ~
    Peggy

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    1. THANKS for your kind feedback.
      But tribute as I stated in my note at the end, doesn't only my Mom but anyone who has closed any relative or friend.

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  4. Robin, For some reason I have been thinking about my mother a lot these past few weeks as I have been participating in an anthology of my own - humorously - so very different from yours, but the same in the honor of her memory. She died many years ago when I was young, but I know my love of literature is due to her influence. Your prose is a good tribute to your mother. Too bad all of our mothers can't be here to talk to - but again maybe they can be in spirit. Good job!

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    1. THANKS for your feedback. AMEN to the spirits of our mothers who will always be there to guide us.

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  5. Thank you for the invitation to read your work--so powerful in such few words. And such a wonderful tribute to your mother.
    I lost my own mother fourteen years ago. Memories of her still guide and strengthen me.

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    1. And THANKS for your WONDERFUL feedback. MOMs do that all the time, don't they?

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  6. Beautiful story.
    As the others before me, I too have lost a parent, my father just shy of a year ago, and not a day goes by that I didn't wish I could just hear his voice once more.
    *hugs*
    Thank you for sharing something so personal.

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    1. Allow me to echo my THANKS to you for your feedback. You "can" hear his voice, but only in your dreams, and in those times when you really will need to.

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  7. Robin, to say so much in such few words is a feat in itself. But the way your words go straight to the reader's heart shows your artistic quality and sensitivity.
    Thank you for sharing this masterful piece.

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    1. Hi Marta,

      THANKS for your wonderful comment. I never really anything of what I've written for the prompt word for this week. As you can see each sentence begina with a different letter of the prompt word. I basically made my mind a blank, and everything else fell into place.

      I only hope I'll be able to include the same kind of strength of emotion in what I'm writing for my second romance novel.

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  8. Wow, the sadness that you brought across in so little words was amazing. Great exercise though. Many blessings to you.

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    1. I can't believe I've moved so many people with these five simple sentences. Perhaps this means I'm a better author than I'd ever had imagined myself as being.
      THANKS for your feedback.

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  9. Sometimes from darkness comes light. Good job!

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    1. THANKS for the feedback. Glad you liked my endeavor for this week's prompt of "WORDS"

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    1. What more can I say Grace but THANKS for your feedback.

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  12. A very moving, 5 sentences capturing so much sadness in so few words. xx

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    1. THANKS for your kind feedback.
      I actually didn't set out to write this, but after I'd written the first sentence, everything else seemed to just fall into place. And the difficulty to write this increased when I decided to start each sentence with another letter from the prompt word "WORDS"

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  13. Dear Robin,
    Your inate ability to reach the hearts of all reading this short piece is nothing short of amazing.To be able to touch lives with words is a talent not everyone can express. However, you make it seem so simple.

    Micki

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    1. THANKS Micky for your wonderful comment. It might seem to have been easy and it would have been even easier if I hadn't chosen to write it without the added letter restriction I decided to use.

      Writing from your own experience is sometime easier than writing something which is pure fiction especially since in pure fiction all emotions must be created from scratch. And the journalistic expereince
      I had writing commentaries helped me in making it concise.

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  14. This was very creative. I am so sorry for your loss, my father died 13 years ago and I still miss him.

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    1. THANKS for your feedback and belated condolences,

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  15. Very beautiful, Robin. My mother died 40 years ago and her words have sustained me for my whole life.

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    1. THANKS for feedback and wonderful compliment. Truer words can't be said.

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  16. Too many loses these last few months.

    Your words speak true.

    JxB

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    1. THANKS for your feedback.

      You have my condolences and may you know of no more sorrows.

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  17. HI Robin, I lost my mother to cancer March of 2012. This year I wrote a short story about the trials and her journey. It helped to release my feelings in to words. My mother always encouraged my writing. I miss her terribly but she is not hurting any more. Her little dog, a Jack Russell found my house about 1/4 mile away. I would take her home and the dog would keep coming back. I finally accepted that I am not just a cat person anymore. Now I have a dog. Sugar was a determined pup and it was her determination of walking to my house 3 different times that changed my mind. Now we are best of friends as me and my mother were.

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    1. Hi Patricia
      You have my belated heartfelt condolences. THANKS for sharing this tragic moment in your life. I guess what I've written has been more powerful than I'd envision it would be to have elicted this comment from you; and makes you wonder how I can go in elicting strong emotional responses from potential readers on matters of a more pleasant nature.

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  18. Interesting story imbedded in five sentences.

    Thank you.

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    1. THANKS for stepping by and your feedback.

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  19. A truly lovely story! This is a wonderful reminder to cherish each conversation with the ones we love. Brilliant :)

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    1. THANKS for your feedback and your wonderful complient. This one especially means a lot to me since you're the one who's creative this GREAT writing excercise for us to endeavor doing using your prompt WORDS.

      I guess my ability to use an acrostic format in my response(s) does take a little more effort to accomplish, but in the end I feel it's worth it.

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    2. Yes, it's definitely worth the effort. Adds a little something to the exercise...your own personal touch :)

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  20. This is really great! And very powerful! I think that this works for anyone that has lost a loved one, not just a parent. I really enjoyed it.

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    1. THANKS for your feedback and compliment. I glad you loved reading it. If you have a chance I'd love to hear your comments on some of my other endeavors.
      And if you haven't done so already, I'd love for you to consider being a follower of my blog,

      Have a GREAT WEEK !!! :-) L-) :-)

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