Monday, March 11, 2013

FIVE SENTENCE FICTION - Whisper

I'm a little late in doing this week's endeavor for the prompt of "WHISPER" for Lillie McFerrin http://www.lilliemcferrin.com

A HORRIFIC ERROR
Jennifer rushed into her home with her friends like gangbusters; loud and crude not realizing at first her mother, Barbara, was being questioned by three police officers who standing around her, she wanted to come closer to find out why these officers were here, however her mother motioned with her eyes to stay away.

As she left with her friends, Jennifer became extremely worried about the police being there and the way they’d been questioning her mother.

At the same time, when these officers no longer could she Jennifer and her friends, now wanted to know who these people where.

“They’re only my daughter and some of her friends,” replied Barbara nervously.

Hearing this, one of the officers pulled the other two aside and whispered, “What do we do now, because the woman we want has no children living with her?”


4 comments:

  1. Uh oh...I want to know more about this.

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    1. Hi Ann, I'm glad I've been able to piqued your interest in my flash fiction story. There are numerous ways I can go with this, but since this can stand on its own, I'll let my readers decide what happens next.

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  2. We know that such "errors" actually happen, and you brought those fears to life with this little intriguing tale. I am concerned about a daughter that would leave her mother being questioned by police!

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    1. Hi Josie
      THANKS for your feed back. After I read it, I noticed I had left a word out at the end of the first sentence. I've corrected it, and now your concern should be at an end, The end of the first sentence should have read:

      "...however her MOTHER motioned with her eyes to stay away."

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